Analytical Writing Assessment (AWA) | AWA - My first argument essay. Please evaluate it

Hello, today I'm writing my first argument essay. Could you please have a look at it and tell me what you think of it? It is 580 words long.

Thanks inadvance.

Argument

Collectors prize the ancient life-size clay statues of human figures made on Kali Island but have long wondered how Kalinese artists were able to depict bodies with such realistic precision. Since archaeologists have recently discovered molds of human heads and hands on Kali, we can now conclude that the ancient Kalinese artists
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