Analytical Writing Assessment (AWA) | How to get 6.0 AWA....my guide

Good day all.

Thanks for awesome material.

I have my GMAT in December and so need more practice in AWA. Taking into account that this place is full of 6-graded i want to ask you guys for a little help. Could you please provide your comments of my AWA essay (see below). Thank you inadvance!

PROMT:
“When the Apogee Company had all its operations in one location, it was more profitable
than it is today. Therefore, the Apogee Company should close down its field offices and
conduct all its operations from a single location. Such centralization would improve
profitability by cutting costs and helping the company maintain better supervision of all
employees.”