Analytical Writing Assessment (AWA) | Re: Kindly Review my AWA

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Request you all to kindly review and rate my AWA as given below and tell me how can I improve.
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Question:-

The following appeared in an announcement issued by the publisher of The Mercury, a weekly newspaper.
“Since a competing lower-priced newspaper, The Bugle, was started five years ago, The Mercury’s circulation has declined