daagh wrote:
The issues are parallelism, incorrect word order leading to altered intent and pronoun ambiguity
A. When a ton of wheat was being moved from Buffalo to New York City before the opening of the Erie Canal in 1825, it took three weeks and cost $100, but when the canal was used, it ----'It' lacks clear antecedence. It must refer to moving but has no such word in the text. In addition was being is ugly and does not refer to the generalization but to a specific instance
B. Moving a ton of wheat
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