According to United States census data,while there was about one-third of mothers with young children working outside the home in 1975, in 2000, almost two-thirds of those mothers were employed outside the home.
Issue:Construction
Analysis:
1. The sentence presents two data points without trying to establish any causal relationship between them. Hence, the use of "while..", "even though..." and "with..." is incorrect.
2. Also, pay close attentions to various modifiers
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Issue:Construction
Analysis:
1. The sentence presents two data points without trying to establish any causal relationship between them. Hence, the use of "while..", "even though..." and "with..." is incorrect.
2. Also, pay close attentions to various modifiers
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