Someonelse wrote:
Overall impression: 4.0
Generally, you are applying the 6.0 AWA template well. However, the essay is missing the obvious flaws in the argument and is using a limited vocabulary.
I noticed the following when reading youressay:
- Paragraph 1 and 2 criticize something that is not mentioned in the summary in the introduction.
- The criticisms in paragraph 2 and 3 are not the most obvious flaws in the argument. For example one could criticize the following low-hanging fruits:
- Readers of the Homebuilder magazine are very likely to plan to build a house, that is why they are reading the magazine.
- Just because a lot of readers plan to purchase a home in the next 2 years, this does not mean that the construction industry will grow. Maybe in previous years the number people who planned to buy a home was higher.
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