Sentence Correction (SC) | Even though his predilection for initiating

If it is not a GMAT quote but your personal one, IMO, they are not parallel. As also in other points raised by me,
it is seen that the two nouns stated are not even separated by a punctuation mark. If such constructions are your own personal styles, you are entitled to them, as much as one need not entertain them. Best of luck

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