Analytical Writing Assessment (AWA) | Looking for critique for my practice AWA

I have completed an AWA practice response and would really appreciate some critiques forimprovement.


Essay Question:
The following appeared in a newspaper editorial:

"The claims of some politicians that we are on the brink of an energy crisis are misguided. We have enough oil in reserve to see us through any production shortage and the supply of in-ground oil is in no danger of running out any time soon. There is thus no need to set aside the technology and infrastructure of a century
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